All Comments on 'Temporary Boyfriend Ch. 08'

I really liked the premise to this series...

a rogue transforms a (semi) virginal, (semi) ugly duckling into a Swan.

Cute, a R rated Hallmark film, or as an earlier commenter made about an earlier chapter, a Pygmalion (My Fair Lady...for the literary challenged) thing.

But getting the sister involved kinda wrecks the boy meets girl romance...but its main issue is is strains credibility.

In what world would there be beautiful submissive Twins with the same sort of limited sex history in need of a firm hand and makeover by a dominant guy?

Hot twins who just happen to be lustily bi with an incest kink.

Might as well make the MC a James Bond, or in the words of Raj on the Big Bang Theory.."A well hung billionaire with wings".

Aside from that, a nice story, technically well written.

Double your pleasure, double your fun!

5

Nothing very romantic about threesome's. Unless the sister's are ONLY fucking him and NOT each other. Gross! 1* for the entire series.

I liked the original storyline. When the sister was introduced as a sex partner for him, it started to get away from the premise I liked. Then, the incestuous twins just started to bring down the story for me. I’ll try and finish reading the following chapters, but may have to abandon this.

These past few chapters have felt like the cliff’s notes for a long, sexy story…more like vignettes of the highlights - I can’t tell if you’re just treading water to get to the end of the story, or if you’re moving a basic plot along by in service of a more detailed story later, but either way these chapters have felt rushed - several of the paragraphs could have been chapters on their own (Charlotte’s first trip, the Xmas trip, Charlotte & Taylor’s arrival in Boston with the trailer, New Year’s Eve, just to name a few).

No judgement, it’s your universe, just my perspective on this - take you time and tell the story you want to tell.

Cheers,

Tex

This series just keeps getting better. Can't wait to see what happens next. 10 stars!!!

I really liked the premise to this series...

a rogue transforms a (semi) virginal, (semi) ugly duckling into a Swan.

Cute, a R rated Hallmark film, or as an earlier commenter made about an earlier chapter, a Pygmalion (My Fair Lady...for the literary challenged) thing.

But getting the sister involved kinda wrecks the boy meets girl romance...but its main issue is it strains credibility.

In what world would there be beautiful submissive Twins with the same sort of limited sex history in need of a firm hand and makeover by a dominant guy?

Hot twins who just happen to be lusty bi with an incest kink.

Sure, it could happen but I want Josh to buy a lottery ticket for me since he has astounding luck.

Might as well make him James Bond, or in the words of Raj on the Big Bang Theory..."A well hung billionaire with wings".

Aside from that, a nice story, technically very well written.

Would be nice if Monica and her sister will be involved with the encouragement of Taylor and Charlotte.