by ArkansASS
take your time and put your chapters together. these are too good to be so short. even a 3 page story with 1 chapter is better than 3 sepparate half page chapters.
Ask and ye shall receive I guess. Good follow up chapter but a little rushed. I noticed some typos, missing words and missing punctuation. The story and flirting between them is still hot though and I like the way it’s escalating slowly. Keep it coming!
I'm throughly enjoying the story. Wish it was more than one page at a time. Appreciate you sharing and keep writing!
Thanks for the feedback. I really appreciate it! Chapters 3 & 4 are pending for release.
Keep some reluctance from the mother!! Let him gradually break down her barriers, let her be regretful etc. These stories on here move too fast and seem unbelievable. Yours has potential. 5 stars