by Just Plain Bob
why run in closet,you home and kick her ass out.you make things so hard and it makes the writers look stupid.where is a man thinking,i'm mad my wife fucking others and kick ass.husband acts and sounds like a wimp.how old are you who write this shit.15to20.
The story wasn't bad but lacked the "HEAT" like the stories "Naughty High Class Mom" part 1&2
WHY would anyone put effort into coming up wth an ENDING for a crappy shitty idiotic bizzare pathetically stupid story by JPB the world'ss best writer for the sexually moronic?
we know
1) she has been fucking LOTS of guys ...
2) she did fuck men her hubby knew
3) she stopped doing that ONLY when the cunt whore wife thought these guys were smirking and starting to brag and he -- the stupid HUBBY --was getting suspicous
4) so instead of stopping she decides simply to fuck LOTS of strange men
BIIIIIGGGGGGG QURESTION IS THGIS
IF the wimp husband throws her out will she cry One tear?!?
Here's your ending, you weiner, "kill 'em all ,let God sort 'em out".............works for most of your stories.
First, Jerry jacks off while 2 guys fucks his wife. Then why should he care about Edie being a slut? Is he offended because her lovers are his friends or her lovers are strangers?
Second, other than his lack of knowledge regarding her flings Jerry had a happy relationship. So what if other guys have smirks on their faces she went home to him. So what if he had some creampie from friends and strangers (In this story Edie did not clean herself up so Jerry will no doubt get some creampie that night)?
Bottom Line:
There is very little conflict from this story to cause a real confrontation. A second part would result in either an open relationship (they really did not have a marriage) or he become a willing cuckold hiding in closets watching his Edie fuck others. Therefore, a second part is not needed.
The story "John and Jackie" begs an ending but this story does not need one.
SleeplessinMD
Husband should tape the sessions for his divorce then use the info and video to crucify the pricks.
Pat .
Atlanta,Ga.
they show how dumb many readers are, since they ignore the fact that the story is just meant as a starting point!
seriously however, it's a good idea, if it persuades wannabe writers to dip their toes into the water! good show!
Just Plain Limp characters, plot, and story. Do you set a timer for 3 minutes and just bang out these stories. Would it be a waste to bring up the old adage of Quality before Quantity?
Set them up to fuck again. Turn on all the gas jets after shutting off the pilot lights. Set a dial up phone in the kitchen. Let them start fucking and call home.
Nothing original just the so common "I caught my wife fucking so I have to jack off."
He will go along with it, watch and masturbate or he will join in and get off that way. I know that is how JPB would end it.
Here is my ending. I got film on her doing a man I did not recognize and I divorced her cheating ass and since we lived in a state where assets were not evenly divided no matter the reason for the divorce she got her cosmetics, clothes and her dildos. Goodbye slut bitch.
Do I want to see a sequel? I like the last commenters ending. Can Ohio top it? I guess we'll see...
Two stars for him jerking off to watching his wife cheat, instead of going next door and kicking some ass!
Any story who jerks off while watching her with other men turns my stomach.
Too bad writing wooden lead characters and turgid unoriginal plots don't turn your stomach. You'd be a candidate for 6 pack abs and up for role in Magic Mike III.
"I tossed my sandwich into the garbage, grabbed a dishrag AND WIPED UP THE PUDDLE OF CUM I'D LEFT ON THE FLOOR and then hurried into the bedroom."
... The fuck?
That one came up so out of left field, I had to re-read it at least three times, and restarted the story again, just to make sure I missed something - which I didn't.
Don't know why JPB felt the need to add in this little note, but, not only was it extremely poorly introduced (zero mention about Jerry being the least bit turn on by what he saw, let alone so into it, he seemed to have came buckets... without touching himself... of even taking his junk out of his pants... but enough to manage to soil his kitchen floor!), but it majorly changed the reader's overall perception and opinion of the main protagonist. It's one thing to be shock upon finding out your wife is cheating on you... another thing to take the time to fully witness her betrayal... and even excusable to get hard while watching it - hey, people are human... but to actually end up cumming because of it? Without even touching yourself!? Well now, at this point, we went from betrayed husband to straight-up willing cuckold territory.
Is it why Bob added it - to give the maximum options possible to whomever wanted to complete his story... even though doing so doesn't gel at all with how he initially described Jerry to be like? Sigh... A this point, it seems like only ohio bothered to do a follow-up to this one - love his writing, so I pretty confident he'll right JPB's unwelcome flight of fancy... hopefully.
Overall... quite an unoriginal intro to a LW story, to be honest. But hey, with those stories, it's rarely where you start and/or when you end up that's interesting - it's all about the journey.
The ugly, depressingly jarring journey.
on this website.
Let's see. He just watched his whore wife suck and fuck 2 guys in the neighbors back yard and he is afraid of getting caught??? He still wants to see what she is up to??? You have got to be shitting me!
This writer is just a complete retard brainless to write something so stupid pathetic nonsense like this lame story.
Complete trash and waste of time.
1* for this crap.
Bob could do a real cuck story too. This near the bottom of all his writing.
Thank you for allowing other writers to complete this Chuck story!! Maybe they can grow some balls on hubby...
No wonder why this failed. Lol. You’re a great writer but your cuck crap sucks.
lol at annony who needs a gun to deal with a cheating wife, what a coward
glad someone finished the damned story.
be grateful to Ohio you idiot Just Plain Bob
Yes I hate this story. I will never enjoy a cuck story, but please way to much venom for a writer who continues to post excellent stories here. I am always pleased to see a new post by JPB. I have run into many authors here that write good stories that do not include cuck themes in their stories, then as I read through their catalog I will find that they did try one or two just to sample the genre(maybe). I give credit to all writers here whether I have read them or not, or if I have even been in that category. So please, state that you didn't like the story and why. Give some constructive criticism (like : how about giving us a heads up at the top if cuck story?) but dont denigrate the author. Whether you get it or not they are writing for you! Thanks all authors and thanks literotica.
Any man that gets off seeing the woman that he loves sucking off someone other than her husband should be shot. I’m sorry but these stories are just so pathetic it makes a mockery of the whole marriage thing. That is the whole point of marriage to love your partner and not to mock the church or who ever you worship. If you can’t stay true to each other then what is the point of anything. Any writers that need to write this sort of thing are no better than a cheater themselves. Doesn’t anybody understand what true love is I think nowadays they think it’s a joke I don’t. If there was any justice I would do like saddletramp wrote. Any cheating and would get thrown into a volcano. No questions asked you cheat you pay the price.
She has burned her marriage. Maybe she can get it back, but I doubt it. I'd take up the challenge, but there is nothing about her that I want to pursue. Can't kiss her, can't hit her with a baseball bat. You just walk away, divorce her, and never bother with her again.
Another-1 star story. Reading JPB is like hoping for a mountain and finding a canyon.
@Dnvrdave58
You obviously didn't read the prologue to this story. It's an invitational for other authors to write and ending to it. That's why there's no ending duh!!
What to do about a cheating slut, it will be interesting to see what the other 2 solutions will be.
" I wasn't ready to confront the cheating bitch just yet - I wanted to find out more about what she had been up to first " WHY??????
And seriously???? "I was going to have to reevaluate my friendships with Marvin, Harry and Joe" dumb
Oh yes, he hates the cheating bitch so much he took his own cock out. What a cuck. Shit story.