All Comments on 'What I Wrote'

I loved it. Thank you. Fantasy

Very well written. Even without the graphic details it had all the desired effects. Would have liked to have had portions of thoughts from the teacher, but still a very very good and erotic story. artj92000@yahoo

Fantastic story, excellent build-up and good characters. I am very impressed by this story. Great work.

You get inside the head (and body) of your central character brilliantly. I felt her anxiety and her slowly awakening arousal. Very sexy story indeed. :P

great story! i really don't know what else to say that hasn't already been said, not only about the sex, but also about the characters. wish i could write like that! :) will read more of your stuff...

I've been reading these stories for several years now and yours is the best nonconsent I've ever read. Bar none.

i have never gotten as aroused by a story as i did while reading this one. your character development is amazing and im looking forward to reading the rest of your stories. my pussy is soaking wet right now..mmmmmmmmm

You really build up the tension between Amy and Mr. Tendale, her internal conflict is delicious. She wants him but she doesn't want to submit. so well done. Thank you.

You're the top of the pops on this site. As a woman, I'm just amazed at how accurately you write about female psychology and physiology. The realism and the pacing are what make this erotica truly erotic. Brilliantly done. More, more, more...

I can't stop reading this! Different parts, different days, different moods. I love to suck cock. Her pressed into that corner, his hands all over her. Oh God, yummmmmm! First time I read it I had to change my panties before I went to work. It might be long, but its sooooo worth it! Thank you thank you thank you

So hot. A great story to read. Just like I was watching it. You need to write another chapter.

That was THE BEST story I've ever read on here. The minute my man gets home, I'm attacking him. Thanks!

Good Lord, this is the best erotic story I have ever read by far!!!

This was awesome! I've read many many nonconsent/reluct stories over the years and this by far outdoes them all. I know others have mentioned your character development, and they're so right. Her fear, reluctance, and eventual compliance is so real. But, not only did you get her exactly right, you did a wonderful job with him as well. Most writers would have rushed it and had him take her much sooner. But, that would have lacked all the anticaption and the excitment. I could read this again and again and again and get as excited as I am now. Superb job!!!!

It's tough to find well written smut. Well done, youbadboy. Let me recommend Pat Califia's Macho Sluts. You won't be disappointed.

Without a doubt, this was the best story I've read yet! Well written, VERY hot, Thank you for this one!

I was having such a bad day -- a bad week, really -- until I read this story. I don't think I've ever gotten this turned on by simply reading text on a screen! Excellent writing, great dialogue, sexy characters. Thank you: you've given me just what I was craving. You see, my husband's not really a take-charge sort of man when it comes to sex, which is disappointing because I have the deep dark fantasy of being "taken against my will" which I'm sure many women entertain. With the hubby though, I'm always the one running the show in the bedroom. It's been getting me very depressed lately because I'm just not satisfied...but I'll be able to hold out a little longer now that I've read your superb piece of lierotica. Thanks!

I've been reading your work for a while now, and I'm never disappointed.

Very well written story with a great believable plot. This is the first story I've read by "youbadboy", but it will not be my last. Thanks.

I'm speechless.

What a fascinating mind you have, what a gift for writing...

Thank You

This was the best story ive read yet, and im looking forward to reading some of your other works.

You are an amazingly talented writer! This story set me on fire. It's not just the sex but you really know how good a mind fuck is. I love your stories!

I really enjoy every story you write. This is my first time reading a story in the category and it's got me thirsty for more! Please tell us more about yourself...

Merrie80@aol.com

I noticed you broadened your scopes a little from incest/taboo, which is good for prudes like me who don't like to picture their family members while engaged in erotic activities. Still, this one has the same element of crossing social boundaries, and tons of erotic tension. You have one of the most imaginative minds on this site; I've read this story more times than I can count, and I will continue to do so. Who knows, one of these days I'll get curious and see what your "primary focus" is all about.

In the meantime, however, I'll be waiting for the sequel.

The sex scenes on this site usually leave something to be desired and after reading about "his monster cock" I roll my eyes and skip the story, but I loved the descriptions in this one - read every single word because you didn't waste any of them. You got the tone of it just right - the weirdness of doing your teacher, the guiltiness, and the way you described the little details, such as him locking the door to that conference room, made this such a realistic story. I mean, I've never had even anything close to this when I was in school, but the fact that I seriously felt like I know from reading this story is a great testimony to your skills.

I found it sad as well and I think that added to how much I enjoyed it. I'd like to think somewhere down the line they meet again and fall in love, but tchhh, yeah right! It was a great, great story that has many more dimensions than the usual student-teacher fuckfest. I liked how he could be gentle and she was a very well-developed person - NOT just some slut. She had a best friend, worried about rides home, and carried good grades. The ending was so perfect - simple, realistic, touching. It was really very well written. A few grammatical mistakes, but nothing that detracted from the overall mood. I also felt that the beginning was kind of abrupt and not as interesting as the rest. Still, I loved it. Thanks so much for taking the time to write such an evocative story! It is definitely one of my favorites. I can see why people would rate it so very highly :)

And by kind of good, I mean, holy crap was that awesome. Kudos to you for holding off on the actual penetration until the end. This was a three orgasm story for me. Off to bed with a smile on my face. Thank you!

That was a good read. Thanks. ~ Red.

That was the best story I've read on literotica. I came twice while reading this. Excellent job, keep it up!!!!

just wow, extremely well written and supremely intense, very much like a great rollercoaster ride from start to finish

This story was incredible. The build up was intense and I enjoyed visualizing the teacher breaking her in. Making reference to the girl's writing early on kept my attention and the little hints throughout made me anxious to get the whole story. Great work.

Amazing!

Holy fuck, that was amazing. The only things I had a problem with were a few spelling/grammar mistakes, but since it's supposed to be written by a naive teenager, I wasn't sure if you put those in on purpose or not. Either way, ridiculously hot.

On several levels, this story was provocative. Besides being erotic, the conflict between the Mr Tendale and the Amy was engrossing. I figured that eventually they'd have sex, but I couldn't have guess how, when, or where. Good suspense, conflict, and erotica. Great story.

This story is lightyears ahead of almost everything else on this website. The complexity of character development, the realism, and the masterfully described moments of mutual orgasm just put this over the top. I found myself wanted to read after I came, just to understand the characters better. Wow. What an accomplishment.

Indicative of the writing prowess shown in this submission is the following subtle jewel:

>>"Too late," I said it mean, as mean as I could, but it came out all quiet and afraid. <<

The story reads as utterly believable and the details are conveyed as they should be. There is one point where I had trouble with the realism; where they pull into a parking lot near the girl's house and there is no presumption of privacy while they fully engage on the hood of a car... I had some trouble with that lapse.

This is probably the closest I've seen to a female character in the NonConsent/Reluctance category being characterized as a real human being.

Awesome.

- a female reader

Amazing and well written. Really enjoyed it

Hot damn you know what a woman wants.

This story like so many of your other stories was amazing. And I think that was why it was so amazing. Most pornography writers on this website just write a description in the beginning and then sex. Don't get me wrong that's good too! But the thing with you is that you don't just write sex you write a story too, helping us - the reader - get involved and feel what is happening . That is what is amazing.!! You make us believe in what is happening. Also you know how to please me and make me cum more than any other writer on this website!!! xx

It was a good story, but a little slow moving at the start for me. It held my attention well. The only thing I would change, is to have the paper earlier in the story. If it was me I would put it before the papers are handed back to the other students. This way the reader would know what it was all about.

donny759

It was, at first, a wrenching experience to feel the lust, frustrations and anger of each of the characters, flowing back and forth male to female, but by avoiding the lurid, you gave me a chance for a new experiencee. A bit disorienting at first as my brain reinvolved itself but passionate. Where will you take her?

I don't quite know what to say. I've liked many of your stories (In Sara's Pants is a repeat read), notably not only for the length and detail but also the characters, something you don't see a lot of in this kind of literature. Very well done. I am impressed.

Well written, I liked it a lot (also kudos for the 1st person perspective)

I'd have liked more on this and other themes though, your other stories are all incest ^^

Love your writing. Just the perfect degree of reluctance being slowly, gradually overcome by building lust and loss of control. Keep up the good work.

this kicked ass. the tension you built into the story raised my senses as well as my c___k! i can't wait for more

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I swear it's like you knew how to push nearly all of my buttons in one story. Absolutely amazing! Please don't stop writing!!!

- Nolatrinity

I'd like you to know that I never, ever comment or leave feedback--this is the first time I've felt that it was important to let the author in on my experience. This story made quite an impact on me. Although I fantasize about 'being forcably taken' the stories in the nonconscent/reluctance category on this site almost always bother me, and ive largely given up on them because I end up dissatisfied. This is usually because I'm not interested in reading about rape, or because the characters are entirely flat, just an excuse for a sex act. In your story you capture exactly what I am looking for: the inner struggle between desire and control that really characterizes my enjoyment of the nonconscent/reluctance genre. I really liked how she bites and scratches him in the end, like even after she has submitted to her desire something inside her still needs to exercise some power.

Brilliant storytelling. I'm very impressed with your ability to write such a real female experience. I write to ask you to write more nonconscent/reluctance stories. Incest really isnt my thing, so I probably won't read your other stories. But I will certainly check back periodically to see if you ever write more stories like this one.

Thanks for a pleasurable experience!

I never comment...

In fact, this is my first time to ever comment.

But this is the best I have ever read.

I love the balance of reluctance and desire.

Perfection!

Xoxoxoxo

Katie

I'm a huge fan and I read every single sumbissions, once, twice or more. But this one, by far is my favorite. Please don't let this the only story you ever written about Amy and Dan.

Omg u must write more

Sooo delicious

You did a great job of building tension.

Well done.

You broke the mold. Soooo different from all the Teacher-Student stories out there. I love the genre and have read dozens of them. Thought I read it all but yours really surprised me. Very enjoyable read! Pease keep writing!

In my mind I heard the Police singing "Don't STand So CLose To Me." while I read your story.

This was super hot. I love how they fucked on the car. I almost didn’t read the end because it might take away from the teacher fuck. Great job. I love your writing style in your stories. Thanks.

Forget the content...you have talent. Great story.

Absolutely loved this story! My only creative criticism would be the last part. You stated she is in the honors English class but the last part is written like a gossipy teen talking to her friends. Would have loved the ending to have been as well written as the rest. You have serious talent though, I'll be reading all of your stories now.

wow....

so hot

so awesome

What kind of weird ass school places rules on the style of bra that can be worn? Most schools have a "no visible underwear" policy, while only very few specify the colour of a bra. Absolutely no one dictates what kind of bra to wear. This inane plot device makes the story ridiculous and utterly unbelievable.

Pyro650

Slut shaming disguised as erotica.

Great story, loved it however the “essay” confused me, shes meant to be an intelligent English student and one: this is not written in essay style, two: the grammar and spelling are deliberately awful