by James Cody
I loved first part, but the 2nd one is so confusing and "all over the place", that I was scratching my head most of the time.
Where the hell did you go? After a vey promising start you went of the trail.. path.....damn you fell clear off the mountain. It's like you started on one trail then lost your way.
You had a rocking part 1. This 2nd part needs to be reworked. There were too many things happening that should have been broken up into other chapters? I don't know and couldn't figure out what you were trying to do. The brother thing...Kamiko....the Lady. All deserved more development on their own.