All Comments on 'The Ranch Ch. 01'

I like the start. Keep going. Dont care about negative comments and dont let they stop you from writing next chapters

I don't usually leave comments on this site, but after reading some comments you received, I thought you might need to hear this. The problem I see with this chapter is that you spent a lot of time building the world, and very little on the actual story itself. This could have been a intro/prologue to a longer first chapter IMO.

The world you described makes sense (except maybe the times required to reach orgasm), but the words describing the different groups of the population have other meanings in reality, and therefore the readers need to make an effort to look past those connections. Which, I think, is why some readers aren't happy with this chapter. If you can find a way to remedy this, I think a lot of readers might have different opinions on the story.

Lastly, don't get discouraged, and don't stop writing. You're doing very well for someone whose first language isn't English.

For everyone who has given positive feedback, I'm definitely planning on publishing new chapters to this story, I've already submitted the 2nd chapter to literotica. The 2nd chapter will definitely have action.

I think its great i just have notes for the future. When you write it best to show not tell. So like starting the story and within it you show what the world is like. A great example for the sentences you had about each group's place in society would be instead of saying that one group is above another you show that through out the story.