by Blind_Justice
Characters were a bit shallow but that fit well with their actions. Probably was submitted too late for the Halloween contest. Worthwhile try!
This story was used for an anthology before and there was a hard 10k word limit, so I had to cut back on my usual level of characterization. I had thought to overhaul the story for the contest, but got blindsided by the deadline. No time for sweeping changes, so it is what it is.
Thanks for the critique and the kind words.
Excellent , great rhydhm ,maybe the last scene is too short but good enough
When I wrote that the characters seemed shallow, I intended that to be complimentary! I felt that their being that way enhanced the tale.
I enjoyed the premise. It works very well as a short story, and the sketching in of the characters was just right. Nothing essential was missing. A touch of Greek tragedy, complete with a chorus (Amanda, Jake). Erika's character harkened back to one of the witches from Macbeth. Lovely.