All Comments on 'The Duke of Cockaign'

Desperately needs editing.....

As I have a similar fantasy, this was great. Really hope there's more chapters soon.

I agree with earlier anon regarding the need for editing. I could not get past the first few paragraphs.

I loved the story.....keep going

I could not continue after reading a few paragraphs. It was apparent that you did not know the following elementary grammar. It was so grating I had to give up on what promised to be a good story.

Your: it belongs to you.

You're: You are

I did not encounter these errors but I suggest you do a little research to be sure you know the differences between these words:there; their, they're.

Good luck. You have the talent.

Once this story is properly edited, it would be one of the best things on this sight.

I so wish it was me, Bella is a lucky lady

I had to force myself to read this shit because I can't leave things unfinished. How the fuck is this in the hucow tab?? Also please learn your grammar. What the others haven't pointed out, do not use double negatives!

This was not supposed to have been released. I mentioned this a few times already. I am in the process of re-writing it taking it to a third person perspective.