All Comments on 'Mommy Talk: A Daughter's Sexy GF'

Prety good story .. You were right about mommy.. LOL

What a beautifully depraved story! Please tell me you have chapter 3 lined up, Jasmine. Fran and Ashley could dp Payton (you don't mention if she's ever done anal.) I look forward to reading tge next filthy chapter. I give this one 5 stars.

Nice, erotic story. But I only gave it 4 stars. Many errors that should have been edited out. You’re usually much better than this.

Too many errors. Who proof-read this for you? You need to sack them.

This was just as hot as chapter one! I'm looking forward to more chapters in this "Mommy talk" series. I noticed one of the commenters criticizing you for some errors in your writing, don't pay any attention to that idiot, it's still a fantastically hot, sexy story. I gave this one 5 stars also, and again I would've given it more if I'd been able to. By the way, I love a woman who wears stockings, either thigh highs or with garters. Although, there are times when its hot to feel a nylon covered ass too.........mmmmmmmmmmmmm. Keep up your excellent work my dear!!

Nice story, was hoping Ashley would come home before they were done, maybe a third chapter. maybe Payton will become a mom of a new pillow princess

I’m hoping Part 3 has Ashley coming home with a nice cream pie and sitting on her mothers face with it! That would be so hot!!

Loved it!

Author's Note

My apologies. I sent in the wrong edit. So the new one was sent in today and hopefully will be online in a few days.

My double apologies to my editor.

Thank you. This is why you are the best writer there is.

Such a hot story, absolutely loved it so five stars. I was surprised at the amount of errors though as it's very unlike you - then I saw your note below so all was forgiven :-)

Weird staccato style and too many Fuuucks and Moohs, hallmarks of a lazy style. Didn’t enjoy this at all.

I have to agree. I gave up reading this after the first page. Something a teenager might write.

The updated proper version is now online.

Have to agree with the lazy writing comment, a common thread with your stories. Two stars.

568. Just love reading about pussy pleasing.-my favorite meal. I think these are your most realistic stories.

Very. Nice. Love the tit play by Fran.

Lovely. This deserves at least a Chap. 3 with Ashley, Payton, and Fran pleasuring each other and together. The "other girls" can come later, though it would be "squirmy" to hear about Payton being serviced by four of the "girls." So much to consider; so little time. Haha. Thank you for the lovely stories.

Good story!!!!!!!!

This is also a GREAT story to go with the other one!