All Comments on 'Memoirs of a Shared Wife'

****Good opening to a new adventure. Thanks for sharing.

Better all your stories were now called "Memoirs of an ex-wife." You're a slut, and your hubby John is a pathetic slug.

The story line sounds promising, but I won't likely catch the next episode. Your refusal to even go to the trouble of capitalizing the names of people and places, and your habit of making every sentence into a new paragraph show disrespect for your readers.

Your writing is good, but you need an editor. Proper names should be capitalized.

Just another cheating slut married to a spineless wimp. Puke.

Could you please make amendments to your writing style to make your efforts very much more readable and easy on the reader's eye.

1/ Capitalise Christian Names, always. Stella, Tina, Harry, Tony.

(also Proper nouns, eg Wednesday, Church View, Tales of Summer Wine,

2/ Apostrophes do not go on plurals photos, cameras, 50s 60s guy's.

3/ In the midst of text, don't put numbers, eg 'There were fifty people', and not 'there were 50 people'.

4/ Punctuate quoted speech. "Here we bloody go" needs a full stop before closing.

5/ Homophones are the very devil. "Months past." oops. Should be "Months Passed", and Whose, Who's.

Cheers, and Best Wishes,

Hoping to read lots more from you :)

Kilroy.

You want to write stories which to me is great. But you want to write them as memoirs which to me is fine. The real problem is that most of the writers put there memoirs ( and a few more chapters) into the novel category. Now again I’m not going to say anything like what a idiot for putting your so called memoirs into a category that slams stupid stories like this. I’m just want you to know your stories would have been twenty times better in the novel category so you can write stories on how you want to write stories. Not be held back because you chose the wrong category and only write in what’s fine in that category. But hey don’t blame me if you’re slag off later for writing such crap. Where you would not get anything like that in the novel category you would be free to exercise your mind. Oh well good luck

Too many misspellings.

Too many composition errors for the story to pique my interest. Seek the help of an editor.

You seem to have received a rather mixed reception to this first chapter of what I think is a story with a lot going for it. Don't be disheartened by the unwarranted criticism, although not perfect your story is good, and I'm looking forward to reading more of it. I'm coming in to your saga part way through, so I shall have to go back to the beginning to read them all in sequence. I liked it enough to give you 5 Stars and I favourited it too. Well done!

MEMOIRS OF A GAY HUSBAND.

Truly terribly written memoirs at that.

Theres been 2 closeted male writers here that wrote decently but still handed out by the numbers, telegraphed cuck crap.

There are two shift keys on every key board.

Learn their function or quit posting.

I hope the next instalment isn’t to far behind Pipa

Capitalization isn't that difficult.

Mrs. Marple returns in another hot adventure.

You would swear there are nothing but 60 year old frustrated english teachers reading the stories here. It’s a entertaining story with decent character devolopment. Quit your whining and move the fuck on.

Bravo! I'm intrigued...