All Comments on 'Meeting Mia and Elliott'

You are one of my favourite authors on Literotica, and the undoubted master of the fast set-up for a story (2 paragraphs and just 309 words before getting into the action), but, while the action was original and very well written (as always), I felt the set-up was too rushed in this story. Elliott's action of dropping to his knees and peering up Linda's skirt came across, for me at least, as a little too blunt and crass and made it feel rushed. The action, once established was written with your usual style, but I feel this story might have benefitted from a little more build-up (how did Elliott and Mia feel) which, as it's written in the 1st person, means more dialogue to set the scene and give us an idea as to why Elliott and Mia were so keen. Hope you don't mind the feedback - still a good story. Thank you.