All Comments on 'I Really Fell'

I miss the old Paulene who had her act together and was loyal, trustworthy, and honorable. She would have been worth following to Brown or Horton or whatever name school back east.

Ever since she skipped out just before her planned wedding to shack up with a married man, her behavior has degenerated to match all the other selfish girls in rob/bob's life.

Your universe still need a perfect female character, just for contrast. -- the ideal that keeps rob returning to the dating frey.

Dumbass cuck

She was willing to cheat with him on her husband, and willing to cheat on him with her husband

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He refuses to take back Pauline for nothing more than dating other men, but is willing to take back a woman he knows for a fact is a serial cheater who had multiple affairs??

No flipping way. Insist on DNA tests for the girls, even if they are his she's proven to be incredibly untrustworthy as a romantic partner. I think the mc is just scared of being alone.

Wow. Not a 4 but not a 3.

Cuck boy is in for a life of extreme hurt. Won’t take long for her to open up their marriage, too, as he’s barely the second place option for her.

no loving wife in the story so why was it in LW. hope she isn't over sexed still. he marring someone that was in an open marriage bc she can't live without it hope he gets a prenup lol. this would be better in romance. didnt really have anything for me. a shit load of broken sentences, missed words, words that shouldn't be there. hell its getting old saying that here thing i'll stop saying that. im sure u already knew that

The quality of your stories has taken a serious nose-dive lately. Maybe it time to try something new

Sorry this reads more like an outline or a sketch than a fully developed story. In addition, there really is no background or logical train in this one. Seems that every major plot point is a Deux ex Machina entry or exit from off stage. The whole thing is way to piecemeal and the conclusion is the worst Deux ex Machina contrived mess I have seen recently.

Sorry but it is 3 stars and that is stretching it.

This isn’t one of your better stories.

Pauline wanted to date other guys and she was a bitch, Julie didn't want to marry him and she was a "disappointment", and Barbara two-timed him, lied to him about her marriage and then leaves him for her husband but he ends up marrying her? You need to have a very fertile brain to imagine that.

Perfect setup for chapter 2 when she cheats on him. Once a cheater always a cheater. He’ll probably make a great dad. Just a lousy husband

Another predictable story from JPB.

2*

Good luck, Forrest. Jenny has your number

I don't read other comments, but I consider this another great JPBob story. 5 big stars from me, as are most of your LW stories' just saying

Of the 3 women in this story Babs was probably the least worthy of commitment to. She's admitted to being highly sexed and commited to cheating on a spouse. Bobby is written as a complete wimp for settling for a tramp. She will cheat on him the first time he leaves town on a business trip.

This is one of your better-wtitten stories. However, the ending was unrealistic and rushed. The ending lowered the overall score to a 4star rating

She lied to him for their entire relationship and he does to a knee immediately after seeing her again? Doesn't track, it's either just a bad idea or your missing a chunk of sorry there

You always write good stories, in my opinion. Continuing with my opinion, this is one of your best! I'm glad it worked out with him and Babs, his true love, and probably her true love, too. Her commitment to the other guy she felt compelled to honor, and she probably loved both men. She could have been more forthcoming with our hero, but he would not have stood for it, with her being someone else's wife. She probably knew that, hence the secrecy. Too bad he missed some of the infancy of his twin girls. I suppose his cousin knew Babs wasn't all there for him, although it sure seemed so at the time. Maybe she saw some wistfulness of something in Babs' eyes. You should ask her. Five stars and a thank you, JBE

So she ends up having twins and no husband so she goes back to the guy who said he loved her. But what if the kids weren't his after all?

Seriously?? She has no problem leading lying to the MC. Leading him on. She had no concerns about deceiving her husband about who the baby's father might really be. She shows up out of nowhere, says hi baby and he drops down on one knee to marry her? No, not even close to believable.

Another convoluted classic only from the mind of JPB. Bob brings in the full cast of characters, especially our favorite slut Pauline performing her infamous cock lust for another riotous diversion.

Thanks JPB. I was hoping you would partake in this story line.

Doc

There ought to be quality control to be included in events. This is a hot mess. There are plot holes all over the place. It's a God damned disaster and the ending makes absolutely no sense. Marrying the cousin would have been more satisfying. How you even manage a 4 rating at this point is astounding. I am never going to be one that yells "cuck" like some insurrectionist. The problem isn't that he married Babs, it's you failed (and miserably) to justify the decision. Your ability to develop characters isn't great but it's usually better than this hot mess.

I don't see a happy future for our hero. Overall, this was a pretty good story, but it seems that Babs just wanted him back because of the kids. She has proven herself to be a girl that easily fucks around and is capable of shutting off her feelings and breaking up relationships easily. Bad choice in a wife.

She didn't exactly hurry back to him, did she? Did she run out of guys in Ypsilanti? I'm not too sure about because she knows, KNOWS, that she can keep a husband and a lover at the same time. Will he visit Atlanta again, because she's kinda "if you can't be with the one you love....."

And like some others, I also miss the confident and independent Ms. French.

After all that he knew and all that those girls had done to him, he STILL just accepts that the children are his!!!? Dumb!

A truly clumsy RAAC. I say "clumsy" because the MC learned nothing.

To write a good story, you need tension and a character arc, wherein at least ONE of the characters learns something and develops further from it.

Pauline learned nothing from her first debacle.

Babs learned nothing -- she came back to the MC only because she got knocked up.

And worst of all, the patheic MC learned absolutely nothing from TWO crash-and-burn episodes (Jules was honest), and like a dog returning to his vomit, wants to marry the cheating ho who never even told him she was already married.

Not even a good RAAC, which are possible.

So much for one bitten, twice shy! It would be more believable if they reconnected on the phone, she discloses that he is, indeed, the babies daddy. With all of the feelings about not ever finding his true love, it sounds like a desperation to be married. Some people felt that way and did what he did (someone very close to me) and that wound up a shitty marriage. Decent overall story and well written as usual, but the conclusion didn't fit the events.

Stupid is as stupid does. JPB this should have been called the Ballard of forest gump

That was pathetic… how is he sure that the kids are his? It’s not as if Babs was a paragon of virtue?

"she wanted to keep me on the hook while she dated other guys" - There's nothing wrong with not being exclusive as long as it goes both ways. Now, if she wanted to date other guys while he had to sit home alone, then good riddance to her.

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"When you told me you wanted to know what other guys were like, it was the same as telling me you weren't satisfied with what you had." - Exactly.

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"We both can play as long as we are careful and don't let thigs get serious." - I guess she failed that requirement!

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He told her there wouldn't be a third chance.

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@lujon2019, Babs wasn't a cheater, she and her husband had an agreement. I agree that she wasn't honest with Bobby, and if it wasn't for the kids he should probably dump her.

Don't let the bastards grind you down, Bob. You've still got it. Deus might take umbrage at the "Deux ex Machina" characterization by servant111, and enderlocke77 should read and follow his own suggestions about clipped sentences, improper words, etc., and learn about upper case letter usage.

The story was developed well, and the ending was "typical Bob," giving us credit for the imagination to end the story favorably for ourselves. I have read your entire story list twice, and often go back to favorites. Please keep writing!

RJDinNY

Great story!

Sure, a few flaws in all your characters but, what a ride!

I'm amazed you could pack that much drama, sex, and different relationships in three Lit. pages.

Wow this man has some really bad luck. I hope this time it works out.

So he won the loser girlfriends contest? Every girl he ever dated was a cheater, period. Seemed like a very sad story to me.

Pretty standard JPB fare, but good enough for a Lit 4. Now, why do authors write absurd horseshit like this? "...by the time I started high school, the "Female is the weaker sex" was history..."

The "World Champion" women's soccer team lost badly to a U15 Dallas boys squad; women in MMA complain about being physically "overwhelmed" by chemically castrated trannies (in fact the trannies can pretty much dominate any women's sport if they are let in (gymnastics being a likely exception); women have to be failed upward to become "Mommie Rangers"; standards on fire and police physical exams have to be severely lowered to let the girlies pretend that they can be cops and firemen (there's an hilarious John Stossel video of a girlie fire hose crew getting whipped around by a fire hose that they have no chance of controlling), and so on, and so on, and so on.

Same old, same old.

Nice twist at the end.

Great story. There ain't nothing plain about you, JPB.

I think he needs a DNA test to make sure, also she said she loves her husband but only liked him a lot. Still a good read 5 stars

"I threw myself into the business and didn't bother trying to find someone to form a relationship with."

Nowadays that would be the best ending. Too many 304's running around thinking they have gold in their boxes.

JPB writes cautionary tales for guys of "the marrying kind" that it won't be easy and they shouldn't get their hopes up.

As for his proposal and Babs acceptance within minutes of seeing each other for the first time in a year, I too would be wondering how Babs got pregnant with her IUD in. Perhaps Charlie was ok with her fwb with Bob, but not with the other other guy(s?) Babs hooked up with at home on that winter break.

Bob wants to be married with children and is taking the ignorance is bliss approach and betting his life that Babs will settle in and want to make the best of it. At least until the kids are grown, tick tick tick tick.

Note: No cucks were injured in the production of this story. (Wait, does Charlie count?)

This has been a 'Pour encourager les autres' production.

Footnote: Per Wikipedia first cousin marriage is legal in nineteen US states (Colorado among them and no not all of the Southern ones), and permissible with procreation related restrictions in seven others.

🤣🤣🤣no?? Actually ?? an adult man wrote that ??

Well written; therefore a good score from me, but as to the story's finish - Babs seemes to be just using Bobby to resolve her problems. She said before that she didn't love him, she does now? Why? Cause her husband bolted?

Bobby shouldn't have taken a knee first; FIRST he should have had a DNA test done: the girls may not have been his. OK her hubby was sterile, but with her Open relationship, how does he know that there were only two men tapping that? Should a minmum ask... AND is she going to be a one man woman this time around? She liked the Open Relationship before.

Bobby is risking a lot here.

Oh, I almost forgot - batting averages of 3.75 and 2.90 are impossible; I'm thinking you meant .375 & .290... doesn't affect the story.

I've always enjoyed those odyssey-type JPB stories, and this is a new one cut from that cloth. Although I read a few of the already-posted comments, and admit the critical ones made some good points, I think the bottom line for the MC is that this is the woman he wanted, and feelings are not logical. So I'm going to give a 5 to Lit's consistently #1-rated LW writer, and the others can go hang.

Not bad. 3 Stars.

Julie was honest.

Pauline just wanted him and exploratory dicks too. Nothing wrong with that, provided everybody agrees.

Turns out his cousin was right, Babs was not what she seemed. What she laid on Bobby when she left to go back home is what she should have told him when they first started dating. So some risk she is still not what she seems.

Stupid man. Babs is all open marriage. I hope he can handle that.

nah....but keep writing.....I always want to read your stories even though I don't always agree with how they end

Another formula writer. Same recipe slightly different flavors.

I always wish your stories were longer, felt like a Readers Digest condensed version of a longer story. Still 5*

Good to see you here again. I always look forward to your offerings.

Great story but WTF? You marry a slut you find yourself married to a slut. A nympho slut at that. What's going to happen when his shit slows down and hers doesn't?

Classic JPB tale, thank you.

Very interesting read that provides a “happy “ ending but leaves a lot unsaid. Someone could easily do the rest of the story an bring out her past behavior as a warning of what to expect. And, I would not be interested in reading it

Thanks

till she tells you she is pregnant, Knocked Up, Rabbits in a Coma...etc etc. or vice versa. TK U MLJ LV NV

Now that was an ending I knew wasn’t coming! Or so I thought.

Was really good until the end, she kept the kids away from him,what 3 or 4 years?

None better!

Well written.

I had a nice time reading it.

But it felt odd in the end...

Bob should have investigated further if Babs is telling the truth, if husband (if there was one) is really dead or he ever existed.

Babs seems to me like an expert manipulator.

Okay Bob, how the hell did you turn this in to a happily ending story? With all the falling this poor schmuck was doing how did you manage to let him land on his feet? Guess you proved that old friends are the best friends.

Thanks JPB! I love your stories. Even this one - 5 stars. But I want to tell Bob to keep his eyes open. Babs didn't tell him she was already married and I think that is a strike and MAJOR omission. She knew he wanted more - another strike against Babs. Her husband wasn't enough for her - a third strike. Honestly, you have to say that Bob married Babs because (a) the two girls, and (b) he liked the sex.

Seriously? Both Babs and Pauline cheated on him but, on balance, Pauline was a bit more honest because (a) she told him she wanted to date other guys while Babs never said she was already married, and (b) Pauline cheated on him once we know of while Babs cheated on him the entire time she was married to another guy. Babs was even cheating on the bully because she was married while dating him. In fact, the only person Babs did not cheat on was her husband. Or at least until he decided he didn't like sharing after all. So, the only reason that I see in the text for why this Bobby guy was willing to go with Babs instead of Pauline in the end was because fucking her lying ass was better than masturbating. What a wonderful foundation to build a family on, especially one where we don't even know whose kids she had.

Good author- Good read - Happy ending, awwwwwww.

-but

Duplicitous bitch. Ok, so hubby in Ypsi says it's OK to play, but WTF? Common decency says that she should have mentioned an existing marriage license.

Aw, shucks.

This was...stupid? Is that the word i'm looking for? I'm not really sure how to adequately describe how i feel about the ending, but stupid will do for now.

Yuck.

Shapeless and dull..

What a Lark! Reading one of your stories is like listening to a semi-drunk at a wedding reception telling stories about himself, the family, the bride, even the preacher. And after the drunk leaves you laughing and wanting more stories you find out he's a wedding crasher; doesn't know a soul and no one knows him. But even though the stories are complete bull shit they are fun to read.

Of course Babs will end up cheating on him, and why not? The twins aren't his kids anyway! But he, and Babs, don't find out about the paternity problem till later. Then she admits that Bobby Was her next best guess, but, yeah, it could have been that guy in a red pickup truck. He was hung like a horse and most of the women at the school were fucking him when they could get the chance. Babs still sticks him with child support payments, and his parents still invite her over so they can continue as faux grandparents. In the sequel Bobby starts dating men. He ends up getting a sex transfer, but there isn't anything they can do for his lack of brains. Babs marries the asshole who was bullying her at the beginning of the story. If Bobby had been smart enough to wonder why Babs was dating such an asshole to begin with he would have saved himself a lot of grief. But then we wouldn't have had such a fun story to enjoy. Another case of sacrifice for the greater good. Let's Go Brandon!

One thing about JPB, he doesn't let a small thing like virtue, self respect, or normal human decency get in the way of a character's behavior, especially women. I think JPB is the source of the Martian Slut Ray pandemic in LW; is he Chinese?

Just pulling your leg. How do You like it? Thanks for the effort.

This idiot 'writer' has no clue, an IUD is NOT something you can leave behind, maybe the old guy needs to brush up on contraception BEFORE writing idiotic things like that.

*****Nothing like a good old JPB story to remind you life is full of sex and heartbreak and then some more sex. Good read. Thanks for sharing.

The ending was too easy and too fast...He accepted the word of a woman who lied to him for a long time...3*

A nice genuine romance, good stuff.

Scores 5/5

Thank you! I enjoyed this. And I know its off topic. But could you please do one story where Pauline gets a happy ending? I'm just curious to see it. Maybe for the holidays?

Darn long way around to a Happy Ending, Finally got there though. Bob always puts out an interesting story.

The ending man the ending..uhhhh 😡💩 This MC has a thing for traitorous bitches, maybe that’s what the 3rd chick saw in him and broke it off.

No way he could ever trust her. He asked way too fast. D

Content, Good story but not a great story. Maybe it was Bob as his ability to read these women sucked. Even with the twins I'd wouldn't rush into a marriage with Bobby.

That was different … in a good way. I never saw that ending coming, though I’m a little hesitant about getting back with a woman who thought an open marriage was OK and wasn’t up front with him about her situation the first time.

Come on Bob, you can do way better than this. 1 star for a spineless cuck.

Good stuff - predicable ending and not clear if he was her first or best option. 4*

Since these are JPB characters, it's probably best the story ended here. If it continued, we'd learn that they twins aren't his either.

That was a twisted path! I am left wondering how Bobby got past the fact that she’d used him, and left him in the dark about being married; in light of how Pauline cheated regularly. He’d have to wonder whether Babs would be loyal. The way he immediately dropped to one knee doesn’t fit with a guy who was almost avoiding women.

5*!

Nice ending!

Nope, got rid of Pauline the first time for dating other guys. Now hes marrying a woman who told him she didnt wanna move in with him cause it was too much like marriage and she wasnt ready for marriage yet even though she was married the entire time and didnt tell him till she thought she was preggers with hubby's kid!

Been a while since JPB was writing. At least things that I read. Need to check the dates on the story line to see what I missed. At least I hope to find some!

i had a feeling those were his kids because of all the times they made love

Nope sorry, she played him for so long as a married woman. This new marriage is doomed, the love of his daughters may not overcome the obvious and growing distrust, especially recovering from slut Paulee.

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Before dropping to a knee - he needed to have a come to Jesus discussion/rules with Babs and a clear custody pre-nup - she was the cheater (for what ever reason). Who's the father listed on the birth certificates? Do the girls carry his name? Or will he have to adopt them after DNA verification? We know Babs is a slut - who says she didn't have another man in the mix (we are to blindly trust her due to becoming a mother - NOT)? Bab's dropped out of college she is desperate to find a father!

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This story ended to fast. The author wanted to end on a high note but to many factors to end at that moment. Why did Babs NOT reach out and call him as soon as she was told her current husband was sterile and dumping her? How old are the girls NOW? What is the time frames here?

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3*, Hooyah incomplete ending

Good story. Enjoyed it.

So Sir ... not buying it. You simply don't roll over and accept a known liar and cheaters version of events and ask her to marry you, especially after establishing your no cheating boundaries with others. Just doesn't ring true ... 1/5

A beautiful, varied and coherent story that you told us. You succeeded very well. It's a shame that so little of you has come out recently! Thanks for posting!

This will probably not end well. How long did she cheat on her husband with him, and only comes back when hubby kicks her out. How long will it be before she is cheating on him. He dumped Pauline for doing exactly what she was doing.

I guess I should have seen Babs coming but I didn't. Nicely played.

Just Plain Stupid. No characters, just caricatures.

Sorry. I didn't finish. I got tired waiting for the erotic aspect of the story.

Really enjoyed the story. Gave it five, only thing is, I felt the ending was too fast. I kept think DAMB! He took us up to 100 MPH and then stopped in 5 feet. While I'm sure she had to know how he felt about sharing from their first meeting, and he did say when she dropped out and left him that he couldn't say no to one last farewell love making romp. I guess it makes sense he would ask her to marry him. But WOW!

Love the story. AAAAAA++++++

Babs musta been a superb fuck

Not your best Bobby. Too 'apologetic' for my tastes. But it was good.

After reading this story, either JPB turned 100 and lost his mind or someone is posting stories using his name. The grammar in this story is way below his level and he would never write this drivel. If it was JPB who wrote this then he deserves this "2".

Wow! That was a nice twist! Loved

But why her parents didn't tell him she was married?

Interesting story. It is sad that every relationship decision in made by a woman.

Have a girlfriend - she drags him by the arm and informs him

Have sex - wait until she suggests

Get back together - her initiative

Place for a date - she likes dancing, so the dancing place

See his babies - she drops by uninvited and lets him

For a guy, who stands up to bullies and does not allow cheating, he is too passive.

All he does is react to circumstance.

No fun reading about mc, who does not show initiative, doesn't take any chances, has no plans or ambitions.