All Comments on 'April Fools' Hypnosis'

That’s not how hypnosis works.

Seriously cute and funny.

Probably should have altered her memory of the bet so they can split the bill...

Would love to read about their second session !

Really good. I do wonder how he will drop her again when he made her not be able to drop from 10 countdown. The sex as so hot.

A decent effort. If I could offer a suggestion the sex was too rushed for my taste so I score it a 4.

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Good story,

A fantastic first story for you. An effort to be proud of, now take your confidence and dazzle us again.

A great start. Keep writing!

Good story keep writing.

Ha, ha, That was pretty good. Excellent first time.

You big dummy, you told her the countdown would not put her under anymore and you failed to give her a trigger word that would put her under again, and a trigger word to bring her out of it.now you got to figure out how you going to put her under again without using the countdown.

To all the people saying that the countdown will no longer work, he specifies "This time"...

Yeah, great story, well told. Keep it up!

Fabulous!

Just an academics perspective, it would be more immersive if she were a PhD. First off, more authority so the control factor is higher. Second, there are very few Masters programs in Psychology, and even fewer people with an MS in Psych would be able to be a visiting professor. On the other hand, it's a minor detail that most would miss. Would have loved it if the story were extended, feels like it's missing a third act. 7.5/10 pending ending

I loved this story... I also wish there was a trigger word. Very good story!

Good story, to short, needs editing. Just how many times has he pulled this on Emily? And yes I would think that embedding a 'trigger' would be better and adding a suggestion to keep returning for more. Anony Mous

I wished Mark put in a phrase or something to revisit a hypnotized Emily again. There's so much you could do with this story but it's not in the cards. The only thing you can get from this story that hypnotism exists and Emily with her doctor's degree means nothing. Oh well, good story.