All Comments on 'Ansley Loves Zack'

Wonderful story, I can hardly wait to read the remaining chpaters. Please continue with it soon.

Oh ya. I like the way you write, very descriptive and orderly. You're a good erotic story teller. Coming up with different scenarios for ch.2 will be the trick. A suggestion? Waking up, showering together, planning a day together, mountains, beach whatever. Dinner, dancing close is always a turn-on. Ending the night with teasing playful sex. Hope you don't mind the suggestions; I'm sure you have in mind what you'd write. Definately a good story though.

Keep the story teller in the right person.

this is bad i couldn't even finish a third of the page you kept jumping from one tense to another going from he/she to me/my way to confusing also you said she put on a bikini one piece no such thing a bikini is always a two piece never a one piece go back to school and learn then get an editor and rewrite this crap

Sure enough I quit reading when he started pulling on his 10"er.!! You and a bunch of other writers on here have a "big" imagination and it just spoils the story. Just like 40DD's do when they talk about there females in here. Good luck finding every other man with 10"s or better.!! LOL

I see from other people that they understand that some of us are gifted with a 10 inch penis. Sorry if you haven't had one or seen on, but they are around.

Keep writing, very nice start, can't wait for the next one.

I agree with those who want another chapter. I hope you will write chapter soon as I really enjoyed this first chapter.

But an editor could do wonders for your work. I do want to encourage you to keep on writing. I think that, if you work at it some, you could seriously improve your skills.

Don't write a part 2... First part was bad enough!

It was great duck that other dude write another one.

You should TOTALLY write a part 2. I loved this story and I'm curious about what will happen next between them. :3

would definately want more

Love it part 2 please