All Comments on 'Abby Ch. 01'

great to have you back in the saddle again. looks like you might have another winner here. love the start of it keep it coming for your fans.

jake

great to have you back KK this sounds like a winner to me. cant wait to read more of it. if it's like your other stories will be another great.

thank you

jakewho69

looking forward to your next chapter, but would rate higher if it was a little hotter. Cheers

And brought a lot of memories back for me. I am looking forward to future chapters.

You're one of the best authors on literotica, glad to see another submission. I like the background and the credibility of the stories, there's more to sex than just the physical aspect.

Talented writer - and from the comments well regarded - a light hearted review of some recent author works indicate some readers could say the unexplained 180 degree changes from the initial storyline created attitudes (husbands) are hard to sell and be reader accepted. They can appear to be author contrived and unfounded from the created storyline factwise which can cause the reader to feel minipulated. Unpleasant and not entertaining. Lesser authors are often excused as they don't know how to position to sell the change - the more talented are usually held to higher expectations. Some humerous recent author stories the husbands marital positions were: 1)Cuckolding dates are ok but later not ok because affairs are no longer acceptable just 3ways? = reconciliation HUH! 2) From no sharing of wife to club swapping wives is ok but not female on female or husband involved 3ways? = divorce HUH! 3)Wife forbid to pay rent with BJ's to it's ok but only BJ's but then caught in 3ways(bad) then finds out still whoring old boss (bad) = reconciliation HUH!

When things can't be sold or explained it isn't just a created braindead husband thats needed - the author really needs a braindead audience - so, put your hands up if your braindead - thanks - now look around for approval then put them down slowly - Good dogs - ah mean husbands - Have fun - Regards

Would you mind explaining what you are trying to say in your comments. You are all over the place and to me you make no sense. Rambling comments such as yours are of no value to an author because they don't make a clear point.

Sorry - To be more direct and understandable.

A talented experienced author's storyline once estabolished should be followed for a reader's fullest satisfaction - dramatic changes in a characters prior estabolished values and mind set without reader understanding don't contribute to story credibility or full reading enjoyment.

In basic, the story flow needs to make sense as well as be erotic or full of great sexual pictures. This is not a moralistic critique - if we have to stop and say HUH - it distracts from staying in the story flow - (rereading back to see if something was misunderstood).

This author is very good and I think could be great - I think the author understands the stories and examples prior cited by me - perhaps I could have been clearer to other readers. As you said - a constructive thought offered. Thanks for comment - Regards

glad to have a person back is one thing,but a great story is another.this was ch.01 or was i wrong.have someone already read the story.

When you know that you read only one chapter; even more so, when you know that you can read the whole story (like when you decide to revisit one of your favorite writers). The point of doing so is IMO to compare notes on just what you know so far, maybe in comparison to K.K other stories – but taking into account the stage you are at, at the time of your commenting. <P>

K.K does not make it too easy on the reader as he builds in inherent tension between what happened to the relationship at some later point in their development, and the innocent description of the beginning of the same relationships. It’s as if the author is saying: you figure it up. You get to see what no one gets to see in real life. You get to see a future state of relations (as of now we don’t know if that’s the end state as well - most likely not). What would you have done differently; or what would you have advised any of these characters (with or without the future knowledge). Any complaints about shortcomings in judgment or character, at least for now, unless essential for the introduction of the main characters, could not make much sense at this stage. <P>

You read the chapter with an ominous feeling, and you search with a magnifying glass for bad errors on either side. So far, just the regular insecurities (of different types) in each of the characters. At what point will things “go south” for real? To the extent that K.K has prepared the background for the real fallout, we already suppose to know the answer, only we don’t know it yet (we may guess though). <P>

Sorry, I almost forgot, It was a pleasure to read of course.

A FIRTS FOR LISA. Are you sure you non't know Jim and Lisa Wilson of Castro Valley Ca.( now Lisa has moved to southaven Mississippi. Guess she got tired of Jim always watching sports instead of fucking her. Perhaps that is how Lisa became a whore, because f Jim and his always watching sports. One night she told him that she was going to fuck me and he just kept watching a game on TV. I think he might have eaten my cum out of her after i fucked her. She has divorced Jim now and taken back her maiden name of Deberry but she is still a whore. Of that I am certain. So your story is not so far fetched at that.

It must be tough for girls if they are seeking a long-term relation; that is marriage. If they give in too soon, the guy may thing she is a slut and only good for sex. If she waits too long, the guy may give up and find a more willing girl.

You would think 5 dates is not too soon; but, for this guy, she should have waited until an engagement or several months.

those idiotic ramblings edify no one

those idiotic ramblings edify no one

You can't tell what a woman looks like by her voice on the phone.

I knew a woman that on a scale of 1 to 10 with 10 being best would have been a 3 on a good day, but she had a voice that most phone sex operators only wish they had.

Thanks for the read.

I read somewhere that people either like BTB or RAAC stories, and are in two distinct camps. It seems that way on this site, though the BTB Crowd is considerably more vocal, intolerant, and includes the anon trolls who just like to type "cuck shit" for everyone's enjoyment. I actually prefer RAAC stories, but also enjoy a well written BTB one. Maybe that makes me "biliterotical"? Whatever- warning me that there might be a RAAC story coming up is a teaser, not a warning.

annony is just an old fat ugly fat fag fool who needs to be banned and put in a home for the fucking insane!

But I guess I never commented. Five stars.

Why an entire story about how they met, etc.? What does that have to do with the issue at hand?

@Onethird, do you mean RAAC or Reconciliation? They are different. A reconciliation starts with the offense not being to brutal or cruel. It's nearly impossible to come back from those. It continues with TRUE contrition and acts of recompense. RAAC, meaning Reconciliation At Any/All Cost, means that no matter what the cheater did, no matter what he/she does, they get taken back. I lean to the BTB side, though I prefer to call it Consequences, because the cheating might lead to a simple divorce, which isn't BTB, but I have no problem with a reconciliation if I feel that it is earned.

"Responsive to her needs." I've only read the first paragraph, and I think I will stop here. A woman's "needs" are vast and ever expanding. It took me maybe two months of marriage to realize my wife had two overwhelming "needs": a "need" for me to completely focus on my career so I could rapidly gain promotions to feed her insatiable "need" for my money and the social status it brought; and the absolutely diametrically opposite "need" for me to be absolutely focused on catering to every swing in her emotions, so that if she saw a cute dog in a commercial while she sat on her ass watching T.V., she could call me at work and I'd drop everything, even if I was in a staff meeting, to rush home and hug her. If I didn't rush home, she would scream about how I obviously didn't love her enough to meet her emotional "needs." If I did come home, say for lunch, she would scream at me for not being at work meeting her "need" for more of my money.

So, fuck you and your needs.

And yes, that is what I told her. Then I told her to get off her ass and get a job. Then I told her to stop acting like a ten year old girl. At that point I asked her if she intended to start shaking her fists and stamping her little feet like the little baby she was. Although she said, "No," she admitted years later that she actually had intended to start stamping her feet. Then I told her to grow up.

So, fuck you and your needs. And fuck Abby and her needs. I'll be moving on to a less childish story. One last question, coming from a man who had to raise three children: a wife, a son, and a daughter; have women always been this childish or is the lack of maturity something that only began in the 1970s?

I enjoyed it for what you offered. It was really short but I suppose that was your intent. A longer version would have been a 5*.

She married a fucking LAWYER and is upset he's trying to make partner? Is she retarded or something?

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