by Just Plain Bob
Good story, but ended too soon. Also, starts out with the main character talking about working in the family business business and needing a B.S. in business, and then changes to someone else completely - awkward transition.
Ah, the little blonde process server chewing gum…she must be a trope as I’ve seen her in several stories by different authors.
A good story left short again. Although it was obvious the story was about him the aftermath is what I want to hear about.
Sorry JPB, I have déjà lu (already read). You've posted this story before. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading it again. 5*~~JB (JPB without the P)
Loved this one. Reminds me of a story I read awhile ago where the husband torments his cheating wife by detailing her assignations in story form online, culminating (if I remember correctly) with her running away after reading his latest story which is a violent btb. Wish I could remember the name for comparison purposes...
Is this a repost? Could have sworn I read it before. Either way good story
Thanks for writing
Unfortunately a repost of one off his recent efforts. JPB stories are good reads, and normally very rereadable, but this one was too recent of a post (6 weeks? Less?). Sorry, Bob. I'm curious, now, to see how different the ratings will be, though. Is that the excuse, and you're sticking to it? 😀
Somehow this story was better when it was called "A Random Story". What's with the repost, eh?
I LOVE YOU, BOB! Short, sweet, and to the point. Granted, he was an eedjit fot marrying her in the first place, but love makes us do stupid arsed things. Sitll, love the simplicity of the story. Thanks
I liked the story, and gave it a 5, not because of complexity, nut simple straight forward execution (KISS). Life doesn't usually happen that way, but every now and then it happens. Keep up the good work.
Great job. I actually have a draft of a very similar storyline but I had trouble making it work. You succeeded, and mine is history.
This is almost an exact re-post of an earlier submission( right down to the MC's career). Why was it not labeled as such?
So much was left out. You did not describe any of results of her actions. Divorce papers being served does not describe the cost of her actions.
Enjoyed both versions of this story, but thought he was far too tolerant of her disrespect. No way he should have ever married the slut. Thanks JPB.
Baseline story for the story he wrote is one of your earlier ones, funny. 3.8*
It does read familiar, and I saw the ending coming, but I still like it! It's a novel way to tell a story and it's always good to get something different. That said, was he nuts to marry her in the first place?
So fucking what? The main character, Josh is a whimp and a loser and got pushed around in college which set the entire relationship up for marriage
What a pile of shit.
He married her knowing she was a. Hester, so I don’t feel sorry for him. Alienation of affection is a bullshit case that will go nowhere. The courts will laugh you out of the building especially as you did nothing to stop her.
Lastly, no state will Allow you to record someone else’s conversation. That goes from heresy to invasion of privacy right funking quick
he knew she was a cheating whore and married her anyway
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I dont feel sorry for cucks who marry whores and then get surprised that the whore is a whore
Abrupt ending… no conclusion or epilogue. This kind of authorial arrogance is insulting to the reader therefore
2 stars
<sigh> It’s like you just don’t care any more. You post (re-post?) a story rife with errors and don’t seem the least bit embarrassed. What’s going on? Are you okay?
Ahhh! Irony of ironies JPB’s MC complains at the start of this that most of the stories on that website are crap and he could do better. Was the MC including JPB’s efforts? Just askin.
Recycled an old story, but added a nice twist to it. JPB, you are a favorite, and the most prolific writer going.
That was amusing. That being said, who the hell goes for a milkshake on a fate in 2023? Hell, we didn't do that in the 90s.
You're dating yourself Bob *wink*
Pretty sure I read this one about a month ago.
Liked it then too. Whatever. I enjoyed it this time as well.
Thanks Bob
This is a reprint of a previous one isn't it. Still needs a blood editor to go over it taking out all the spelling and grammatical errors.
Looks like someone was bored for ten minutes. Man, Literotica really will publish anything.
I read this story here before, almost word for word. Or is it a theme many authors use?
A mashup of two previous stories , why ? Your formula for loving wives works terrifically , just some name and career changes add in Pauline French along with your ability to tell the story concisely while letting the readers imagination fill in the details and presto an instant classic hit
This would have been a good BTB but for the hugely stupidity of the MC guy that, after all the endless red flags about his future whore wife, married her (??? WTF ???). Was he a brainless monkey ? No one with at least a couple of working neurons would have married such a selfish slut. So, just 1* !
I enjoyed this story when you first posted it on April 8th under the name “ A Random Story”.
Great little tale. Taking the old story and twisting it into a new one was clever. I enjoyed the reading. Keep up the good work... Kind of miss the old Pauline French stories... Give some thought to doing a new one.
Short, sweet, overall to the point. But the author made the man into a partial wimp at least. His gf, who he's to marry at the end of schooling, is behaving slutty with this guy at a party, leading Josh to question what she's doing on the agreed dates when he's not available. He thought they're for being with friends, innocent dancing, etc.
>> Prior to the wedding, she does it a few other times & he doesn't mention it. Further amplifying my thoughts on the author's treatment of Josh. He should've confronted her & said the wedding's off, but he didn't. And as a complete fool, he married her. Just to find that she's fucking other guys when he's unavailable due to his job. At least he had the spine to serve her with divorce papers, something I'm sure she never thought he could or would do.
>>> Nothing's said about what happened after he being served up to/ including after the divorce. I'll give this 3stars bec. of the writing but that's all. Almost dropped to 2 due to him being treated as a weakling. But that seems to be a current theme in this author's stories that I've read. Bob
To use the oft-quoted words of another re-run, Maxwell Smart, "missed it by that much" ||.
I don't understand why someone would marry a known lying, cheating bitch. Sticking your head in the sand doesn't change things. Being non-confrontational definitely doesn't change behaviours.
But still, at the end, cute way of letting her know. Me, I would have dragged her out of the house rather than in, and then locked the door.
The guy was an idiot and should have ran not walked away. This plot has been used many times here. Nothing original in it
3 stars - and yes, I also believe that the MC should have walked away the first time.
'Once a cheater ALWAYS a cheater'.
I enjoyed the story, much like I did when you posted it as "A Random Story" just over 2 months ago.
TWO stories with EXACTLY the same highly unusual expository technique on EXACTLY the same day? Hmmm...very interesting.
Another in the very long list of boring, trope-filled and cookie-cutter stories from me. I can set my watch my the plot devices by now, that's how clichéd you are. Obviously with you, its quantity over quality.
I liked this as much as I did when it was, "A Random Story" ! still good even with a new name.
Very thoughtful, pulled her in the house and not out onto the front lawn… lol. And where the heck is Pauline French? Arriving in ch2 to console our hero?
I didn't read "A Random Story" so I liked this one. The MC was a wimp but kind of came through in the end. But you wimped out on sharing her payback with us.
I don't know who you are but you are not JPB. JPB could never, even on a bad day, write something this bad. I am going to be generous though with the 3 stars.
Interesting story (subject -Aircraft Mechanic) and the MC has what we call in the industry AIDS- "Aviation Induced Divorce Syndrome.". Been there, done that ,have the T shirt and I was stuck on Graves for 20 years with Tues/Wed or Wed/Thur off.
Seriously, do you forget the stuff that you've posted? You either need a better filing system or to do some cognitive testing.
Ha, ha, ha! A great short story. Also, not a cuck in sight, what a breath of fresh air!
Not one of your best. Monochromatic and flat. No intensity or tension. What used to be called humdrum.
So his family owns a major airline? He needed degree to work for family business. Get said degree and is engine mechanic? She had a threesome with Mattson and dick Moore? She went with dick and them made out with Mattson. How do you miss that?
Where is the rest of the story? And why did he marry her to begin with? All the red flags were there early on.
Similar to another story about posting a story after the wife challenged him about not being able to write one... but whatthehell... it's a JPB story, so you GOTTA read it.
Very few of your stories get less than 5 stars, and this ISN'T one of those !
Lazy and disrespectful passing off an old story as new is it even yours? And not that great to begin with.
Good story, felt like I'd read it before though. Repeat or not, it was a good story, kept me entertained, so 5 stars for you.
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ImNotanAnon speaks strongly about his opinions. Sadly, he has no examples of what a perfect story for him would look like. Perhaps he could bless us all by providing a story of his own, y'know, something we could all strive to match?
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Who knows? Maybe with his examples of finely crafted tales, we'd all become better writers and write stuff he'd enjoy. I'm very concerned about ImNotanAnon and his inability to enjoy the imperfect stories currently being submitted. Really. His happiness is all that matters.
Why has JPB reposted this old story with a new title? The old creative juices drying up a bit, Bob?
No Fair!
Hubby1 (in family business) is not writing a story, he is reporting history! Hubby2 (Mechanic, probably also Josh B.) has a good neighbor, but neither fictional character is paying taxes.
One of JPB’s BEST!
5*
Like it a lot!!! 5 stars!!!
I would have loved more detail when everything explotes..., both to Melissa and her boss...
Huh. No guy I know would put up with what happened at school. Should've ghosted her there. D
Good story but shoddy writing. To quote the Veggie-In-Chief: "Awwww, C'mon, man!"
Garbage story. If it walks like a slut, behaves like a slut and looks like a slut then she's a slut. Why marry her?