All Comments on '1950s: Naughty Bride-to-Be'

Different story. Most boring and repetitive author on lit. Same themes and words every story...

U never cease to amaze me with your writing. Great storyline

Good writing although the misandry is getting old

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Xzy is partially right, but only partially. Of course her themes are the same, she states that straight up. She does mainly submissive lesbian with incest in the mix quite often. Plus there really are only so many themes. Kurosawa told us 7. For such a prolific writer, I think 500 stories, there is bound to be repetetiveness.

With that, I guess, it could get a little boring at times. She does seem to use the same scenarios, and definitely uses the same words and phrases. If I didn't read "that said, knees, full flood, eager slut, all in, and several other of her pet, no pun intended, phrases ever again, I would be perfectly ok with that. I, and several other commentors, have brought that topic up here many times, to no avail. I mean she's a school teacher for crying out loud, pick up a thesaurus.

Also she writes too quick of a tale. In her storyline time, a woman will be seduced after a random meeting, and a couple quick follow ups, and a total of maybe 30 minutes of time, and voila! She now drops to her knees and from her first time in the situation, she is a full fledged cunt lapping, submissive lesbian whore who cant resist in the slightest to her new (as in 30 minutes old), mistress. And SSL calls this lengthy, and character development? I have even seen her say how much she loves her favorite porn site, Girlsway, a sentiment I share, but wishes they had more of a plot and character development. Seriously?! Uhh, ok SSL, sure.

But I have to defend her good qualities also. Now I'm not a fanboy. If you read most of the comments, she has plenty of fanboys, and even fangirls, though not as much. But I am not one of them. I call it as I see it. And I see this. She's not the most prolific writer on the site, but she's near the top. She is the most favorite, and has some of the most highest rated. One doesn't get that from being a complete flop. Yes, I wish she had more actual plot and character development, and not what she passes for it. But here's the thing you're wrong about.

She has a vivid imagination. She creates many different scenarios and worlds for her stories. She even has an element of believability in many of them. This very story for example. Again, much of the seduction is ludicrously brief, but the idea a secret group of women could be turning out previously straight females is very plausible. And her technical writing is second to none. Rarely do you see an error in her writing. Now I'm not a grammar nazi like some. If the story is hot, I can overlook errors to a point. But there are so many that go beyond that point. It gets to where their story is unreadable due to the misspelled words, incorrect grammar, punctuation errors, etc. You very, very, rarely see that from her, and if brought to her attention, she corrects them. That is extremely refreshing to see when there are tons of stories riddled with errors.

So do I say this as a fanboy? I don't think so. Is she repetitive? Without question. Could she do better? As a teacher, I certainly believe so, and question sometimes why she doesn't? But as one who is just blunt and calls it as it is, no matter where the chips fall, I think you could do a lot worse than SSL. I hope someday she does actually care about plot and character. I hope she does stop using the same phrases in every story. But I will also continue to enjoy her writing a story that I can actually read without trying to figure out what all the errors mean, and writing stories with unique settings that have a hint of plausibility to them. You should try it too, Xzy. Keep them coming SSL. Hopefully with actual development. Lol.

TimTam

Dear Jazz,

Missed you there for a little while... getting concerned!

This is a GREAT piece, with FABULOUS illustrations. HOT... HOT... HOT! The fit is 99%. I don't believe in perfection, except that it is something we strive for, but is never quite achievable. OK then, how about 99.9%.

Even though you profess to be female oriented, you do it for me too.

Love you Jazz,

Jack Auff x o

Thanks for finally adding another chapter to this series. I will continue to enjoy your work. 2020 can not come soon enough for the next installment.

Everything you write is five stars to me, Jasmine. I always enjoy lesbian stories too as I fantasize about my wife being taken by another woman and eating cunt cum herself. And I love seeing pictures of Mrs. Walker - you to me, Jas - with her bare feet and toes I want to worship and suck and her wet open pussy ready for my tongue and cock. Looking forward to more.

good but prefer a good suck fuck gang bang for the cutie

I’ve loved this so much can’t wait for the next one

I love it so much the pictures and the good girl do what you want it make me feel like when I go in the arcade

I forget to ask if you have any other pics and stories about submissive arcade cocksucker slave? Please?

Thank you for great picture

Now that was awesome reading. I read everyone and am anxious to read your next one. You are a awesome writer!

really Looking Forward to the next chapter!!

I can’t wait till Kimberly gives her mother the command and read that chapter.

One of the best stories and I can't wait to finish it!

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I did not comment individually, but all of the stories in this series is great. I love the seduction and submission, and the 1950's journal context is great. I dont usually like illustrated as good as just text. But this would be an exception. I think the illustrations added to the story and made it hotter. I am really looking forward to your next episode, in 2020.

Please finish this series, need to see what happens to Rebecca.

Love how the illustrations add to the stories. Awesome writing

Love the art

Gorgeous. I love it

Absolutely love tbe illustrations ❤️ 😍

These are just incredibly hot.

I cannot stop shaking from my orgasms.. you are an incredible author.. thank you for your stories..