All Comments on 'Don't Ever Play With Guns'

Superotic !!! High 5-ed !

I think this is really superb. I am not sure how it escaped from the Erotic Poetry hub and made its way here. Probably got thrown out for being too savage, frightening the other poems and for actually being erotic.

I think you have got the balance right on this one between rational and irrational so that the powerful phrases are made more powerful and play off each other and the insane obscurity is deeply attractive rather than causing one to lose the plot and hence interest. I think I may be beginning to lose myself – but I guess you know what I mean.