by taiyakisoba
Good plot, balanced characters with male weaker and damaged but also with some talents and other benefits than beying simply sexually attractive to our female hero. Also our hero beying a demon is evading some problems i would have with their relationship if she would be human from the start. Good read
Only problem i have it is related to the very comcept of demons & angels mix. That is simply a thing that makes the story little bit sour for me since i dont like the angels + demons stories ( i like demon stories but not the demons, angels, devil, god etc together as in christian religion). All in all that is totally subjective and others might see it beneficial :)
. . thoughts . . . . First: "+" This is one of the most touching stories I have even read so as soon as I finish this comment and dry my eyes it's off to press the favorite/favorite buttons. and Second:"-" I think you are wrong with he last word of the story 'The End' , I think it should be 'The Beginning'. Otherwise it is clearly a twelve star story, but the voting mechanism is broken at the moment and only has five stars so until they fix that Five Stars will have to do. . . . bye for now, I'm off to the favorite buttons . . . . . . . . . . . . .
It's ok right if I cried a little? I think so. Oh well I shouldn't praise your story much more. Don't want you getting a big head and all ;)
I absolutely enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing it with us.
you are an amazing writer..i cried in every chapter..it inspire me to draw the characters or make a comic scene cause u write it in detail, their emotions, what they look like, everything,, and thanks for making it a happy ending cause if not i'll be depressed in a week lol
I have paid good money for stories that were not nearly as good as this was ... thank you for a great read :-)
I agree with the others, this is a well written and sensitive story. It has enough sex to make it an X-rated romance, but not so much that everything else is just a background for the orgasms.
Another excellent story by Taiyakisoba. Guess he really did turn into a wizard... Hah.
Wonderful job! But u forgot to tell us his name!
i love how you use love mixed in with the non-human element to create a story so fulfilling and rewarding to read. it's the perfect mixture of sex and story. You also can create such vivid worlds under such intriguing concepts. 5 stars, hands down.
Stunning. Glorious. Perfect. I'm at a total loss for words, but please know that this was an extraordinary tale. I'm wiping tears away as I type this comment. 10,000 stars. Your description of how falling and being in love feels was awe inspiring. Thank you so much for sharing your gift. ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️👍👍👍👍👏👏👏😍😍😍☺️
That was amazing simply marvelous 5 stars 10 stars if i could give you them. That was a fantastic piece of work.
That was actually really, really good, not something I would have expected from a demon story.
I'm usually a fan of longer stories, but this one was superb. Keep up the great writing.
This story was amazing! The depth of emotions and the eroticism, as well as the plot. Awesome work you've done here! Please write us more stories :)
*gets to the end*
*realizes the vote-ranking still can't go above 5*
...Shit.
*votes a 5 while wanting a 10*
This might be the best succubus story I've read to date on this site. Bravo!
if only I could have a relationship such as he had with a supernatural being. I am so bored with the usual relationships. I would gladly be
In such a relationship with a succubus or even something posing as a succubus. Feel free to send any my way. Yes, I know what I'm saying.
most of the time , after 3 chapters I'm done . wow you held me for (6) good going .
i SO much wish there were more stars...
Loved this story and now will check other stories by u. Hoping they r same or better. :)
Thanks for a great Love story
The backstory, the setting of your fictional hell with its judicial system and the attention to detail (Your Horror) were only part of the enjoyment. The tender love story and exploration between the succubus and the human was inspired. I can safely say that you are a game-changer on this site.
Please keep up the good work,
Thoroughly enjoyed it and had its nice share of humor and twists and turns. I was literally about to explode in pure happiness when she had turned into a human. I would love to definitely see how their life goes on as a human couple if that were to ever happen. But nevertheless wonderful and amazing story!
The background you invented could make some interesting
stories. (Please take the hint)
That was one of the best stories I've read here. Sex was a secondary component to the story, as opposed to the whole story, and it was amazingly well done! I enjoyed the demonic story line and the "Romeo/Juliet" love angle with a happy ending.
I hope to see something else from you even more entertaining. I think that if you did so well this time you have room to grow . . . but no pressure ;-)
An absolute pleasure to read. I fell in love with the succubus.
This was a great love story. It favors romance more than eroticism but that's not always a bad thing as this story proves. Another spark of interest is your foreshadowing. I'm VERY interested in a story following the relationship between 'Miss Lucy' and this adorable man whom I think we all know. The reinterpretation of the heavenly mythos (why Lucy fell) and the most opposite of opposites attracting (altruistic and hopeful with aloof and apathetic) is such an appealing concept to me and I know you have the skills to do it justice. In any case thank you for the good read.
well written,well thought out,well executed,you sir have hit the trifecta
This was such a beautiful, original and well-written story. I found myself crying at the end.
I enjoyed the start how she told her story, how opposite everything was to being human, the irony was very clever. I actually lost this story and coudlnt recall the title or u as an author, so pleased to have found it agan and able to finish this
I usually avoid stories about demons but I'm glad I found this one. Great job.
I actually started to sob at the scene where Lavandé said goodbye! I really can't remember when was the last time I cried (in sadness) while reading a story! It's so beautifully written and creative... And so, so real! Just like in your other story about the Harpy, the emotions are palpable even if the supernatural states are not! So tragic and yet perfect "she grew her heart only in time for it to be broken"! Their sex was also awesome, very sensual. You really do have a talent, and this perspective is one of your strong points. I really hope you consider doing another story with the male lead to a weaker female lead, because even though there are plenty of stories in that genre, none of those authors are you; they are not gentle or patient, and rarely portray a loving character... Not the way you can! Your story had me glued to my screen from start to finish, you definitely have a place in my heart, taiyakisoba!!!! Hugs!!
My thoughts and feelings of this story echo what had already been said. It had been quite some time since a story on here plucked my heart strings as this one did. It was beautiful, and in so very glad for the ending. Thank you for such a beautiful story.
Awesome! I want my personal demon that I can love!
Satisfying and very nice. Thank you. Just what I needed. 5*
GREAT STORY! You really do have a gift for writing. Sexual; sensual; spell-binding! As you read it, it gets into you. PLEASE continue to write here! I didn't have any favorite authors; I do now! Thank you!!!
This is one of my most pleasant and satisfactory, if not favorite, reads. The characters are quite artfully built and developed, and the plot is very carefully and well constructed. Loved your seamless continuation of the story from the 1st person flashback to the 3rd person present and, frankly, I'm not going to say anything else on it, so as not to repeat myself. Anything else than a huge BRAVO. Your story is excellent, a true masterpiece. ;)
i came here to jack off but ended up getting all misty eyed and not even touching myself once. good golly. this was absolutely precious - fantastic work!!
This story is probably the best that I have read on this site for a very long time. Everything about it was perfect, and to quote a fellow user 'i came to fap not to feel.' I sincerely hope that you keep writing to this level of amazingness for many years to come
But on that note...? It was definitely MORE than I expected...
Once you accept the initial step, everything else followed real well...
Funny how while she was the succubus, it felt like he was the girl in their "relationship"....
I enjoyed this and will likely re-read it at times...
I find myself agreeing with the anon. comment that this is a better love story than "Twilight"
Truly one of the best here.
This was a funny yet romantic story between two otherwise incompatible characters. I laughed my head off at the contrasts between Hell and Earth! The S-/F-word is taboo here, the L-word is taboo there. We have no idea of how to enjoy sex as it is, they have no idea what a date is.
Not only was this one of your best submissions, it was with perfect balance. Please don't stop writing! :)
Never commented before. Simply had too, amazing. Beautiful characters, engaging premise and incredible execution. It wasn't erotic but my Gods it was gorgeous. Well done and thanks for sharing.
Wow. Just wow. There is no describing how Inately beautiful this story is.
This story is absolutely beautiful and is written with such intricacy. This needs to be made into a movie or something of the sort. Please continue creating your amazing tales.
Most amazing story I have read here or anywhere till now. I loved every line of it.. Simply amazing and touchy. Love it.
I've read and re-read this so many times, and it never gets boring. Amazing story, one of the best I've ever read in my life.
I usually come on this site when I am aroused. I'm not into much porn like my other male species. And i just like this stuff because i love the heart behind it...but this story...I won't lie i started to tear up pretty good. I was not aroused in any way shape or form. All that I felt during this story was sadness, hope, and happiness at the end. The guy reminds me kind of like myself i guess. This story made me cry at the end. Don't let anyone tell you nothing but how amazing this story is. It released so much depression for me all I can do is thank you for it.
Absolutely loved it, one of the better stories I have read so far.
This is the most beautiful story ever. My heart is literally so happy right now. I absolutely love it. And it's do freaking adorable... arch. So much love.
I would love it if you would do a part 2 where lavande realises that she can still go to hell and she visits every now and then
Hey is there anyway,you can add to the story??what will it take,btw still love it!!!!
One of the best of the best. Also am I right in thinking that Miss Lucy fell in love with Jesus?
It's beautiful. Gave me the same feels like reading DreamCloud stories.
-Judge
And you nailed it! Great story, unique perspective. Thank you!
You really are an amazing writer. Please keep up the good work. It really was a sentimental story to the point that it had my eyes brimming with tears. Looking forward to more stories with similar theme. Thank you for sharing this beautiful story with us.
Damn, im a 30 yrs old guy. Started crying at least 4 times. No emotional stories from now on.
This is honestly not only the best story on this site but the best story iv read anywhere, you have to keep writing its just too good to end.
I can't begin to tell you how that made me feel. I don't cry hardly but that brought tears to my eyes. It's too good just to stop. You are a great writer. Best one I read in a very long time. Thank you for sharing this.
Perfect. The pain, love, loss and everything these 2 felt and went through is why I love romances. It's funny even when I know a happy ending is coming the emotion and fear that he was going to lose Lavande was palpable. Thank you so much for this story.
Wtf I’m bawling my eyes out right now. I’ve read thousands of stories on here and every now and then there’s one with writing that is truly captivating!
This reminded me of one of my favourite succubus series by Richelle Mead! You should definitely read it and perhaps do a take and expand on it. The world you built is pretty similar. That would be amazing!
Keep writing and I will keep reading!
Being a lawyer, this was an especially exciting perspective for me... refreshing and funny...brilliant work!!
I usually don't read stories this long but someone suggested it to me and I really enjoyed it! Love the stories on here that aren't just sex but also the emotions!
If I could give this a million stars, I'd gladly do so! Dear author, your talent is utterly amazing! This was far and away the most beautiful, emotionally gripping, lovingly erotic and very best story I think I have ever enjoyed! I am a 56 year old man, married, three children - and I went through a half a box of kleenex crying. I fell in love with Lavande -- and I felt so much of both her and her lover's pain. I also would love to see a part 2 of them enjoying the world together - to see her experience of the deepening of their love - and perhaps her enjoying motherhood.
I'd been looking for a good romantic succubus story - everything else I read seems to focus just on the sex or on the evilness of the succubus who, in the end, destroys her "victims" -- I'd been longing to read a story where the succubus and her man fall in love with each other and actually have a relationship. Bravo! Well done!
PLEASE KEEP WRITING!!! You are a superstar author! Thank you for such a wonderful story!
From the romance to the unique portrayal of hell, everything about this story was incredible. Definitely one of the best stories I've read.
I’d give you 6 stars if I could. Magnificient from first word to last. Thank you!
Wonderful. Not the story I was looking for, but it pulled me in to the lovely end. Thank you and keep up the good work.
A very good story in a genre that does sadly become very boring, very quickly, relying on tired old cliches, familiar plot elements and very limited or limiting story potential – mostly the authors rather limited imagination.
This story neither outstats it’s welcome or gives you two dimensional characters. Each character here has a purpose and a life that reaches beyond the page. Simply told Details paint a picture of a complex, realistic world. I loved it. It was a great study and a refreshing change to see something not only so original, but so well told. Thank you.
Excellent story. Had me hooked from the beginning. keep up the great work.
The way everything started in the (courtroom?), calling the judge Your Horror among many other things. Loved everything. Just wanted more than a glimpse into their future. Like them having lunch with the family or sitting together at the park with their kid?
Truly A Masterpiece,Lavande ended up falling in love with Basement Boy,and Miss Lucy knew when Lavande kissed him she would lose her Demonology and become human,that's why Miss Lucy sent her back,cause she went thru the same situation.
Lavande wanted to die to get rid of the pain,but Miss Lucy helped her,thereby turning her human,and sure she would end up dying of old age one day but Lavande gained so much more to have the man she loved with her,and that is worth having a human life.This story was truly heartwarming.
i mustve read this 5 times over the last few years.
just found it by chance browsing the site.
so good every time!
definitely one of those times u can say that
u were reading porn for the story and really, really mean it.
Yes, this is a strange story of the "L" word, love, that gets all five stars. It's very well thought out and interesting to the end with love, sex and humor. The story also shows that Taiyisoba has done his home work regarding demons and devils. I had to stop several times to Google what a new character was. Well done!