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Click hereYou look @ the World :
The World looks back
You look @ a mirror
The mirror cracks .....!?!
Is the mirror reality ?
Is the reflexion reality ?
Are you reality ?
Or is the crack reality ?
What is ......................?
do I see a look alike or a look back, TK U MLJ LV NV
I meant to say more succinctly ! & Oldbear thank U bro -- you're always there for me !!
I like the fact that you don't shy away from this kind of theme, Ash. You express it concisely here, but if you'll accept some constructive feedback, I think you can pare it back, make it less descriptive, and through inference capture the reader's interest more:
You look at the World.
The World looks back,
Look at the mirror.
The mirror cracks.
Is the mirror reality
Or is it the reflexion?
What about you,
Or is what's real the crack ?
I don't think your last line is necessary because all the questions you pose imply the same question.
I'm not trying to usurp your poem, Ash, just trying to provide some food for thought. I liked the original because I like to think about that kind of stuff.